Place and Time Workshop

Kohl :

He wrote a personal essay and I really think that he captured the essence of this writing style. Reading his paper was really interesting and I think that he did a great job with capturing the readers attention. The one thing that I recommended was to fix the way that his dialogue was structured in his piece. I explained the correct way to do it and why this has to be done. I loved the amount of detail that he put in his piece and I could really envision him participating at that specific lacrosse practice.

Ashanti:

She also wrote a personal essay based off the experiences that she had in her car. I read Ashantis essay the first time that we were correcting each others papers and I read it today. I can confidently say that her writing in this piece has improved greatly. She added some humor to keep the essay light and also added alot more details. One thing that I corrected for her was also the dialogue and sometimes she capitalized words that weren't suppose to be capitalized.

Overall both of the pieces that I read were really great and only need a little more work!